Sorry not sorry
Tom TytherleighThis is a picture of Simon Webbe, copywriter.
You might know him as Simon Webbe, seminal – perhaps most seminal member – of boyband Blue. But I know him for who he really is: a copywriter, at the top of his game, using beautiful music to dispense advice on writing.
I’ve known this ever since he sung these words:
Sorry seems to be the hardest word. (Key thesis, 0:56.)
And now I extra-know it. Because recently I’ve spent a good few weeks in and around some pretty gnarly customer journeys. So I get what Simon’s on about.
Copywriting, courtesy, apologising… it’s hard. It’s not like a face-to-face thing: you can’t just contort a smile and smudge on a bit of blusher. You need to weigh your words… go for something a bit poli(gh)ter.
You can do this in all sorts of ways and voices. But as a basis, here’s three bits of advice:
Never say sorry
Unless it actually was your fault.
Compare:
Sorry for the inconvenience, Tom, but we think you got your card details wrong.
With:
Tom: we think you got your card details wrong.
It’s more up-front. Less plodding. There’s no false courtesy.
Please is not the magic word
Forget what your mum told you.
Please can you try re-entering them by clicking this link.
Versus:
Can you try re-entering them?
It’s a no-brainer: perkier, no ‘please’, still polite.
Don’t always say thanks
It can sound presumptive, a bit terse. Instead of:
Thanks,
Company name
Try ending on:
Just click this link.
It’s twenny seventeen. Do you even need a formal signoff?
All together now
Tom: we think you got your card details wrong.
Can you try re-entering them?
Just click this link.
Speedy. Simple. Nice. For more advice: @simonwebbe1